Thursday 20th November

This is my 3rd draft. I have made the note box larger to cover more space and to make it a sort of central image. I have then added an exsisting advert from 'Gallary Magazine' to fill the gap for now. I will have my own advert after Christmas. I have then put 4 pictures on the left hand side to represent other people that are involved in the magazine. I feel that it looked quite interesting with the titles of the person down the side of the image. I have also made some of the words larger in the text to draw the readers attention.

However, I'm not too sure if I like this draft as it gives off an immature vibe. However, I am going to continue to improve it to get the best feeling.

I am going to get feedback off students between 15-19 years old to see how they see the page in their eyes.

Amy, 17: I really like it! the presentation is good and i like the fact the font is a style of hand writing and that it looks like a letter. Also, the aim of the month is great because it will keep readers wanting more. Its nice how it starts with negative points but then goes on to create the negative points to positive ones because it puts the reader in high spirits. the layout and advert works well and looks realistic and the way you have introduced the other colleages. it doesn't look boring and immature, its looks fun and entertaining and straight away attracts the right kind of audience.

Courtney, 16: I like the writing for the note. Its an interesting layout and attracts the readers. However, maybe the title could be bolder or a different colour to draw the readers in. Also, it could be good if you tested with different colour schemes,to see what works best. I like they way you introduced other people that work on the magazine so that the reader knows who else is involved and not thinking its just 1 person. I also like the idea of the boarders having different colours for different areas.
Jade, 15: It is great because it looks really realistic and really draws me into the magazine because of the interesting layout. It gives a good feeling about the magazine and sets up good standards. It has a constant spirit to it and focuses on new musicans and local artists rather than focusing on high fly fashion celeberitys. However, maybe you could make the note a little more informal.
Cameron, 16: Its a great layout and I really like the note writing. I think it could do with a bit more colour.
Need 18 and 19 yr old plus 15-19 yr old boys.
Therefore; I need to look at...
Experimenting with different colour schemes.
The language, if it relates to my target audience.